Here's the basis for the superhero story that came out of thinking of something more lighthearted. It's my take on an un-ironic Kick-Ass. Not sure about it, still working out the narration, but it'll be about making friends and happy stuff. Let me know if you think tone-wise and interest-wise it'll work. Otherwise I was maybe thinking the Bob Awesome story would be a good choice for your style and be fun enough for the book. If you're still free...
Hope you guys had a good Labor Day!
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Young superhero
Anti-Kickass
Inspirational
Non-ironic
Actual super moral ideal
Love story?
Page 1
Origin
Hyper Maximum
Sugar & cartoons
Panel 1
Young kid watching cartoons and eating cereal, repeated three times across the top. (Maybe a bit older each time, or at least in different sci-fi outfits, cowboy to spaceman to pulp-hero?)
HM: (NARRATION) ONE FATEFUL SUMMER AT OUR NEW HOUSE...
MOM: (Off Panel) MAX, DON'T SIT THERE ALL DAY WATCHING CARTOONS.
HM: (N) A YOUNG BOY WHO HAD SEEN TOO MANY SUPERHERO CARTOONS AND HAD WAY TOO MUCH SUGAR...
MOM: (OP) YOU'VE GOTTA GET OUT THERE AND MAKE FRIENDS.
Panel 2
Max running out the front door, blurs into Hyper Maximum in costume.
HM: (N) WAS FORCED OUT INTO THE SUMMER DAY...
MOM: (OP) GET OUT THERE RIGHT NOW YOUNG MAN! ENJOY YOUR YOUTH/SUMMER BEFORE IT'S OVER!
HM: (N) WHERE HE BECAME...
(Title-logo) HYPER-MAXIMUM!
Panel 3
Snatches a cat from the street before a car hits it.
HM: (N) PROTECTOR OF THE STREETS.
Panel 4
Chasing off bullies from a dorky kid.
HM: DEFENDER OF THE WEAK.
Panel 5
Diving and catching a girl falling from a tree.
HM: (N) SAVIOR TO THE MEEK.
Panel 6
Close up. They smile at each other.
HM: (N) IT WAS MY DESTINY TO HELP THOSE I COULD.
HM: (N) THERE WASN'T MUCH ROOM FOR THAT SUMMER FOR...FRIENDS.
Page 2
Partner
Ultimate Extreme
Wrestling & spray paint
Panel 1
The dorky kid from page 1 is now dressed up in a neon costume, raging and yelling as he runs along a picnic table in a backyard.
HM: (N) ONE DAY I SAW THAT MY PRESENCE HAD INSPIRED ANOTHER.
Panel 2
Jumping off and tackling three kids to the ground. HM in the background, high above in his tree house watching.
HM: (N) COULD THIS WARRIOR BE A PARTNER IN MY MISSION?
Panel 3
The duo chasing a bike thief who's speeding towards us. Maybe HM is hanging on the back of the bike as UE grapples the kid.
HM: (N) SURE ENOUGH WE TEAMED UP AND BATTLED TWICE THE THREATS I COULD ALONE.
Panel 4
Eating candy sitting atop the playground. A giant rocket. Outside the window is the girl from page 1.
HM: (N)
Panel 5
Close up on the porthole on the rocket that shows the girl out on the playground.
HM: (N)
Page 3
Panel 1
UE yelling at HM. Wrestling near the edge, UE pushing HM closer.
UE: YOU'RE SO RETARDED!
HM: GET OFF!
Panel 2
Fall out of the rocket and hit ground.
Panel 3
HM hurt, UE storms off as the girl comes up to help.
Panel 4
HM takes off his mask, bleeding a bit from the nose, looks up at us (The Girl) smiling.
Page 4
Conflict
UE vs HM
Panel 1
UE all dark and sinister watches as HM (out of costume) walks around with the Girl.
Panel 2
Ice Cream Truck, he peers from broken slat in fence.
Panel 3
Swimming pool, he hides beneath umbrella as Max dives off and Girl waves.
Panel 4
Max & Girl holding hands, walking towards us, UE in the background, a bit more exposed with a darker costume, riding a skateboard speeding up behind them.
Page 5
Villain
UE returns evil
Splash page
Panel 1 (Main Image top left)
UE dives off skateboard lunging in mid-air towards Max who has turned preparing for attack. Girl is in shock.
Panel 2-6 (all surrounding the main shot)
UE beats up Max.
Roll on the ground.
Punch to stomach.
Kick in the butt.
Pushes him back down to sidewalk
Page 6
Fight
Battle
Panel 1
Girl swoops in, her own costume on. (Flower Girl?).
Panel 2
Gets UE on the defense, Max in background taking costume from backpack.
Panel 3
UE bracing from Girl's attack.
Panel 4
UE cocks his fist back, about to punch Girl.
Panel 5
HM clocks him good with FG.
Page 7
Resolution
Team up
Panel 1
UE is stripped of part of his costume as he shouts from the back patio, the back door sliding closed as he yells.
Panel 2
HM & FG stand atop the tree house.
Panel 3
They look at each other smiling.
Panel 4
Close up on them holding hands.
HM: (N)
